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Although always a writer's choice, use of usually denotes speech, while use of ' usually denotes thought. I wonder your use of ' may cause confusion later. Otherwise great start

boring predictable ,use of real names , the use of the word cunt <<< not attractive.

Your use, or lack of use of punctuation is obscene. There are things called commas and periods. You really need to learn to use them. Really hard to read. Use an editor next time. Lit has them.

Enjoy reading the story, but it would be a better read if you fixed the spelling and grammar issues in all chapters. Read and pay attention to the advice given by Tx Tall Tales (https://www.literotica.com/s/love-your-readers).
Specifically:
- Use Both instead of The both (https://english.stackexchange.com/questions/159907/both-of-you-vs-the-both-of-you)
- Use himself instead of his self (https://languageandgrammar.com/2008/04/30/rid-yourself-of-hisself/)
- Use myself instead of my self (https://english.stackexchange.com/questions/316090/when-to-use-myself-and-by-myself)
- Consider cannot instead of can not (https://english.stackexchange.com/questions/204006/cannot-vs-can-not)
- Use alongside instead of along side (https://dictionary.cambridge.org/us/grammar/british-grammar/along-or-alongside)
- Use afterthought instead of after thought (https://www.merriam-webster.com/dictionary/afterthought)
- Use hyperspace instead of hyper space (https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Hyperspace)
- Use transwarp instead of trans-swarp (http://stexpanded.wikia.com/wiki/Transwarp_drive)
- Use twenty instead of twehty to mean 20
- Use shutdown as a noun, shut down as a verb (https://docs.microsoft.com/en-us/style-guide/a-z-word-list-term-collections/s/shut-down-shutdown)
- Use Every day for a phrase, and everyday as an adjective (https://www.grammarly.com/blog/everyday-every-day/)
- Use elsewhere instead of else where (https://www.merriam-webster.com/dictionary/elsewhere)
- Use led instead of lead when deception led to the destruction.
- Use fourth instead of forth when referencing the next one after the third.
- Use doesn't instead of don't for the third person (http://www.learnersdictionary.com/qa/don-t-and-doesn-t)
- Use nowhere instead of no where (https://www.grammarly.com/blog/nowhere-somewhere-anywhere/)
- Use forty-five instead of fourty-five
- Use better instead of more better (https://ell.stackexchange.com/questions/47284/is-more-better-ungrammatical)
- Use percent instead of precent
- Use overrode instead of over rode (https://www.dictionary.com/browse/overrode)
- Use affecting instead of effecting (https://www.vocabulary.com/articles/chooseyourwords/affect-effect/)